We've all heard it...when writing a novel your first page must grab the reader (or editor) if they're going to read on. Today I'm going to be posting the first page of my novel Healing Springs. I entered this piece in the ACFW Christian fiction contest, and did not final, but the good news is, I did get two requests for the full manuscript from different publishers.
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Chapter One
Breaking and entering, Jackie Stevenson knew it was against the law, but the risk would be worth it. She just had to get her laptop and flash drives. Although her women’s safety advocate had advised against it, she didn’t care. Her soon to be ex-husband Nick had something that belonged to her, something he knew she would come looking for.
Law or no law, she was breaking into his home. She had been waiting for the perfect opportunity, a time when Nick would be gone for a long stretch of time. He would never expect it. Bet he thought she didn’t have the courage.
He was wrong.
Nick’s shift at the Chicago Police Department started at three o’clock. The afternoon sun was warm on her shoulders. She had been watching the house from a distance, just waiting for him to leave. She took her eyes off the door for a brief second to check her watch. Two-fifteen, he should be leaving any minute.
No sooner than the thought formed in her head, she looked up, and saw him. Tall and lean in his police uniform, he looked so handsome. It was what had attracted her to him in the first place. Little did she know the ugliness that lay deep within his soul.
She shuddered.
Colleen, thank you so much for sharing this! Good luck to you on the two that you have out (fingers crossed!!!!) :)
ReplyDeleteThis is a great start. Lots of intrigue and some strong characterisation already.
ReplyDeleteGood luck with your fulls!